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we ought to be in love
OKcomputer

last night i thought (it came to me all heavy
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sitting at the tip top of my skull and then sinking
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slowly down)that flowers aren't too beautiful,  sucking the sun--
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i imagine they are baring some teeth upward at the sky,
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wanting something waiting
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and with deafening colors to make fools
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of whoever picks it.
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do you know that i sometimes wonder what's good
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at all, whats left
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deary? for you to come cuddle me
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to snuggle --
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we won't laugh in order
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to keep invention alive, even those explosive red love moments are not for us--
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they are for some brain-want and a brain-relief, oh
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jesus for this: "i'm just a bunch of limbs moving" and you stay awake
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all night so you can survive tomorrow as a zombie
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because you hate living this way,it makes
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a sad frown out of me.
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except occasionally you are like a lily
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put to music: in this context you
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are beautiful and i am unafraid.:
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i cannot reduce you for
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a bone structure toppling downward,
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tired for a cheap ride.      a lily now,
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and even further: entirely. and i'll tell you something more: you smell so good sometimes. you are too soft and
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you are so heavy on my skull, heavier than
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knowing
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how flowers grin
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11 May 07

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dum-dum
 — chuckles

  you are the greatest on of us all
 — onklcrispy

'one of us all'
 — onklcrispy

this poem is for a boy.
 — OKcomputer

all the better ^^
 — Virgil

something very honest about this
 — unknown

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