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people send postcards
OKcomputer

people are gentle, people send postcards
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to other people
 2
with distance between the one and two.
 3
people miss each other, people feel love
 4
for each other, people get on boats
 5
for long boat rides
 6
to see other people.
 7
people sit there on two separate sides of the world
 8
and people feel sad for being alone.
 9
people with blue eyes love people
 10
with brown eyes
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and people make babies for love.
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8 Jun 07

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yes,
ok~~
amazing, but true;
that's what people do.
 — banditfemme

people people people people ...
too many "people".
People also laugh and cry and smile.
people pray and hate.

This is a welcome change from your 'OKComputerisque" style.
 — trochee

hey this is pretty sweet. Theres not too many "people" for me, just right!
mr_e
 — unknown

what's your purpose, telling how the world is or reshaping it ?
 — greenmantle

its like wishing
 — OKcomputer

nice, but not enough here. It's like a weak cup of tea. Line 4 doesn't seem right.
 — unknown

sounds like david byrne lyrics, which i enjoy.
cities, big country, making flippy floppy, Don't Worry About the Government
 — gnormal

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