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Mad School
larrylark

“I’m here to see snarling faced,
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angry brained, red mist, unlikable Carl,
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who after throwing sharpened pencils  
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at staff with intent to harm,
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particularly her he called “Dyke”,
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honed his razor edged knife,
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and sliced off the testicles of  Mr. Bright,
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the head teacher, despite desperate interventions
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by Miss Buckle, his secretarial  assistant
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and part time love interest- Monday- Thursday,
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9.00- 12.30. Loss of three fingers,
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currently pressing for compensation.”
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“Please remain seated while  I summons
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Mr. Mason, the caretaker, who will escort you
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to the toilet area where said child  is being put upon
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by Mr. Worthington Smythe,
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Physical Education Instructor, who recently
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denied all accusation of of sexual impropriety
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with Jennifer  Goodpant,
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captain of the school shot putt team,
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assisted by Dr. Bomhampshire,
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(B. Sc.Chemistry with Hons),
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while the governors have gone
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like lemmings into the broom cupboard
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(third left after the Holistic breast stroking
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and tantric sex demonstration room)
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to decide whether he should
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be permanently excluded,
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causing much diminutionof his life chances-
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currently virtually non- existent,
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or be sent to Miss Snow’s
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(ex Hairdresser and body oil expert)
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therapy enhancement class
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for naughty boys and girls,
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after the hostage situation in there,
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now in its third day, eases.”
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15 Jul 07

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interesting format of a poem...
 — greenmantle

you seem to overreact : i sometimes write something so that some poems don't fall to soon into the limbos. now, i personally sometimes need rereading...
 — greenmantle

this is too good
 — aislyne

Dear Greenmantle

Interesting format for a crit.

Larry Interesting Lark
 — larrylark

larrylark,

Check out the comment on thread about Wambly being as ass.

Mike
 — unknown

Dear Unknown,

Why in gods name would i want to do a dumb thing like that for?

Larry dum and dummer Lark
 — larrylark

very creative story. another other great poem.

--listen
 — unknown

once again much energy in your effective way at causing a torrent of words to bring about that spark of humor that builds as one reads further ...
 — unknown

Hi Listen

I think I might have a shot at writing short stories.

Larry flypaper Lark
 — larrylark

Hi Unknown,

One day I hope and pray my torrent will turn into a flood

Larry barriers down Lark
 — larrylark

Hi Hairlessclam

I have to say I totally agree with your kind comment.

Larry ever so 'umble Lark
 — larrylark

I think I taught there.
 — taracee7

I think I remember your face.

Larry old board duster lark
 — larrylark

your poem is a laugh with a mixture of blackness i see...
 — greenmantle

Hi Greenmantle

My face is black and shot through with laughter lines after opal just slapped a plateful of mud onto it.

Larry face pack Lark
 — larrylark

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