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Henry And I
larrylark

I tickled Henry
 1
Henry tickled me.
 2
This all took place
 3
In the outside lavatory
 4
 
 
We raced round the back yard
 5
in our oily underwear.
 6
Clothes upon the washing line  
 7
hung around and stared.
 8
 
 
Next day back at work
 9
down the local factory.
 10
Day shift, night shift,
 11
Its all the same to me.
 12

The Henry in this poem is entirely ficticious and any resemblance to other Henry's both living and dead is purely coincidental. The setting of the poem is the 1950's in England when, if it was suspected that a man was gay he could receive unwanted attention from the law. It was illegal to be a homosexual at that time. Reading this poem in no way effects your statutory to be what ever you you want to be.

5 Sep 07

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Fascinating! I like the use of the name Henry...even though this doesn't fit me in the least.
 — Henry

Oh, by the way, 8/10
 — Henry

Hi Henry. My affection is steadily deepening for your fictitious cap. One day maybe we will exchange names

Larry non de plume Lark
 — larrylark

L3, perhaps "this and more transpired", something like that?
"suspended talk and stared"?

Whatever, the poem works fine as it is.  I like it.  
It's much for the reasons of what it does not say, that makes the charm.
 — netskyIam

Neat poem.  
oily underwear: brilliant (ew)!!
 — jenakajoffer

Hi netsky

As you already know, I am a man of few words who lets his idiot finger tips do the talking.

Larry tapped Lark
 — larrylark

upped in two ways.
 — netskyIam

The idea of the poem is a good one, as in the setting, but the execution is poorly handled, its too cute by far. The rhyme quality is just vomitlicious.

and oily underwear? thats just scary.
 — DeformedLion

Should the A in the title be capitalized? Other than that, great poem. Beautiful.
 — Poetry_Lady

Hi jenakajoffer

I frequently used to get oil on my underwear while sat on the porch lubricating my toys on hot sticky days.

Larry skid marks Lark
 — larrylark

Hi Derormedlion

You have a point but I thought that the best way to put the point of the poem across was through a lightly handled rhyme and rythmn which would act as a counter point to the heavily industrialised homophobic landscape within which the poem is set.


Cheers

Larry oiling his boils Lark
 — larrylark

Hi PoetryLady

Thanks for the comment. Glad you liked it.

Larry body lotion Lark
 — larrylark

yeah but no one would get the point if not for the afterword.
 — DeformedLion

Hi DL

Well I guess you also have a point there but it fits with the explanation and I think its Ok to explain context if it helps get the message across.

Larry
 — larrylark

I wonder if you couldn't just solve all those misgivings by employing a title that really works. It will give away nothing, really.  It will hook the reader in.
I am thinking:

"Homophobia in the 'Fifties"

one more idea: "in oily underwear"; omitting the "our" as unneeded.

hth,

Reid the read Welch the belch
 — netskyIam

This all took place
In the outside lavatory

hmmmm..:

This took place in
The outside lavatory.
 — netskyIam

Hi Netsky

What a great title. Why didn't I think of it LOL

Larry without a title, merely a serf Lark
 — larrylark

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