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age(ding!)
hank

my lizard shed its skin
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many times before i when
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shedding skin must
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remember the new side
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remember the new side
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live there it is hard i know though i
 6
know enough to know
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to live where you shed
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to live when you shed
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to be while you're shed
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ding!
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think about anything shedding
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june bug snake cicada pupa oh pupa
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very vulnerable
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must remember envision the new other side
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23 Sep 07

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interesting choice of syntax, implicatives and structure makes it so hard to follow that i love it.
 — MattPat

mattpat. thanks. mat, pat. boy girl. boy boy. pat a mat or mat a pat. if someone is patting could you throw a matt over them? like putting out a fire?
interesting choice of name. will now click on you.
 — hank

well mattpat, i got through three of your poems, maybe four and all i can say is ugh.
 — hank

yes ... a shedding in the structure of the poem, and we the reader are drying our wings for flight... nice!
 — AlchemiA

dull and repetitive.
13 and 14 are more where its at...but it is mostly annoying.
 — DeformedLion

nice poem, hank.
 — varun

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