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If you ruled the world? (recited)
netskyIam

If I ruled the world
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I'd make the ants to build our builds and the mice to mold our cheese and the
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cats to nurse the mice and the dogs to master fleas and the birds to thresh the
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corn as the women rub our backs with whatever love we lack and we'd read and
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write some more of the great our Jesus Lord in our churches built by ants as we
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eat the cheese of rats and when angered car wash cats and go shooting
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birds with dogs bearing guns that they can't draw.
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PULL. FETCH. GEEZ. CHEESE.
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17 Nov 07

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oh
wonderful
the whole damn works is going on, menagerie and wheel of cheese. The only missing component is the audio file.
 — banditfemme

http://tinyurl.com/2q4c85
 — netskyIam

darn it, Donald, you have corrupted our ability to install any sort of working link.
This "feature" spoils the utility of PC for poets.  
tinyurl.com/2q4c85
(copy and paste)
 — netskyIam

Thank you bF.  I'm working on the thing.  Mice now mold, and cats get car washed.
Such power I feel, I am indeed, king of the world, thanks to you. Now rub my back some more, woman!
 — netskyIam

awesome.

it makes me feel like cheese.

...and oh so, so, so much better than mine.
 — DeformedLion

not so. not better than yours.  this is not a competition or comparison.  make a poem of -your- best liking, in your way, as the muse instructs.  
 — netskyIam

yes. better than mine.

feels original. but it isn't...and i like that.
 — DeformedLion

well, then he gives us a tens then?

-gollum-
 — netskyIam

obvious food poisoning
 — poetbill

first try read aloud
tinyurl.com/2q47q4
(will replace with better later)
 — netskyIam

Ok now it's really bad rap
 — poetbill

lol, of course! It really shouldn't be read aloud, no!
 — netskyIam

Silly
 — eyesaque

mice to build our builds?  Are you sure you want it that way?  

I wish you'd put this in verse format to make it easier to read, please.
 — Isabelle5

This is really quite clever in recitation, Netsky.  I can imagine reading it to children in the library - that's a good thing.
 — Isabelle5

Hi Isabelle, it's -ants- to build our builds.
I wonder too about putting it to normal linings, with commas and all.
I think that'd be a cute-killer of this actually-uncute thing, my opinion.
Thanks for the commentaries.   Reid
 — netskyIam

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