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Of Stars and Men
DeformedLion

I have drawn horseshoes in the stars
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watched the men of sand & sun
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melt like plastic under flame,
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it's only tomorrow but pain
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is in the small hand gone ungrasped
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to some floral station amidst
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the torch of clouds & sky,
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where suns wink like tears
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and all children are together,
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shooting through space, dancing with stars.
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Nobody is ever lonely, not in heaven.
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Not in the dreams of beggars,
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who some call Daddy--
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never again.
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13 Jan 08

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You know that could be the most annoying little piece of shit comment I have ever received.
Perhaps I am being irrational, it is aggravating though. It's been annoying me for about a day or so...
fuck!
fuck!
fuck!
 — DeformedLion

seriously, who gave me that comment?
 — DeformedLion

Hi DL

Stop squeaking about the odd rat or two that creeps around in the hold of the good ship PC. You have written a poem here that has made me envious of its scope and imaginative power. Remember most rats are so insensitive they don't even realise they are being so.

Larry the hamster Lark
 — larrylark

Cheers larry,

and thanks for the thing.
 — DeformedLion

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