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opposing metalheads
cuffing hardwood
some rocks pop up
ticked by the flange
like a jumping bean
(they're rounded
belong in a river)
some the spike no budge

24 Jan 08

Rated 7 (7) by 2 users.
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who's matlock?
 — hank

how about

some rocks pop
ticked up by the flange

l8 is wicked.

welcome back.
 — varun

some rocks pop ticked
up by the flange
 — varun

My only suggestion would be that if you're going to make it short like this, give it some more...uh...attack, if you will. Step up the excitement. Other than that, 8
 — IamDave

l5 too.
 — varun

lever action
 — chuckle_s