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well-wrought girls
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Someday middle-aged,
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pretty, funny,
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oddity-free. Well-wrought girls
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all over the streets. I watch through the window
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they keep together in packs.
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I am a lonesome genderless
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almost-fraud. I love only myself
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under the sheets.
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7 Feb 08

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Someday middle-aged, funny
pretty, oddity free. Well-wrought
girls all over the streets. I watch through
the window them keeping together in packs.
Lonesome, genderless
almost-fraud, I love only myself
under the sheets.

there are many suggestions combined.

good poem nonetheless.
 — unknown

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i did not rate.

even if i wanted to, i'd probably give it an 8 or 9. hmm.
 — unknown

Nicely done with hidden anguish
 — larrylark

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