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Weather Downcast.
larrylark

A dry day,
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plenty of sun shine
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will brighten the sky.
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A couple of clouds might fly by
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later tonight and an odd spot might
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fizzle.
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There will be mild because the bitter is off
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and some outbreaks, these fortunately
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being moderate.
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Tomorrow temperatures will climb back down,
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outfaced by a cold affront.
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On Saturday night we will all go out
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in a blaze of glory.
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Sunday will be dull,
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so don't take out the punt
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as it is advisable not to go even one mile
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while the crocodiles hunt.
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Sleet for Monday with hail and hearty
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showers to bring the flowers out
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but don't shout, or you'll bring about,
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the skies downfall.
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9 Feb 08

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too good
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

Who knows?

Larry ? Lark
 — larrylark

larry the weatherman lark.

very nice.
: )
 — fractalcore

the most beautiful poem i've read today, very imaginative. i love the parallel and the ending lines.
 — nisetru

Larry, nice to see you up again.

must admit, not my favorite, but you are always consistent with your quality.

good work.
 — listen

An accurate and detailed commentary on the transient situations which constantly befuddle the mind in everyday life and threaten to boost the overall bottom-line of the cold-hearted institution that produces wellies.
 — chuckle_s

sounds like you live nearby
 — unknown

seems kind of mediocre to me.

..trainride. sky. blue. nothing.
 — DeformedLion

Dear fractalcore

I'll take nice, or should that read ice.

larry the ice man cometh lark
 — larrylark

Hi nisetru

Thats the way i kinda saw it myself

Larry self regarding Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Listen

I am working hard on my quality control but not always succeeding.

Larry like a dog lark
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown

Closer than you think

Larry neighbourly Lark
 — larrylark

Dear DL

I'll take mediocre which i guess is better than shit.

Larry tiger feet Lark
 — larrylark

Dera Chuckles_s

Exactly! And lets not forget goloshers.

Larry footwear fetish Lark
 — larrylark

It reminds me losely of Tom Waits, Emotional Weather Report.
 — CrudeEcstasy

--a cute but not overly trite analogy of moods to the weather.  I like it.
 — CaseyPowers

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