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Hot Air, Winter Sky.
larrylark

High above the beach
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the air balloon moves
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side to side, tethered
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to a weather worn pole
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that occupies a hole
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dug in the sand.
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Its air is light,
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separated by one
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thin skin from
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the ozone that
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swirls along the sand,
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whirling grains
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into ever changing
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shapes.
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For one moment
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sand, ozone
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and thought of it
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briefly combine,
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before the mind
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moves on.
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22 Feb 08

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Cool images - bright, breezy and colourful. This is a good thing to be able to write light and airy without it dispersing into insignificant and indistinct bits of nothing. You've tethered this just right.
 — nakedowl

Dear nakedowl

Thank you for this crit. My problem is that i am all bits of nothing trying to make myself sound substantial

Larry ethereal Lark

PS I do hope your feathers grow back soon
 — larrylark

i struggle to love anything
 — raskolniikov

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