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i advise you to jack-off and keep those cheeks between your teeth
unknown

starting in seventh grade
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i'd suck my cheeks in
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while walking the halls
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between class.
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the idea came to me
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watching
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the cosby show,
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mrs huckstable
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said she did it
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in high school
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to get a prom date.
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i figured it might make me look
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more appealing
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and help me
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put the machine-gun
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between my legs
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to practical use.
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of course
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i already stared at the floors
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while walking the halls
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between class,
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so sucking in my cheeks
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only made me look like an anorexic
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taciturn
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jackass.
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what the girls want
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i found out years later
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is for you to smile
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and take your hands
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off the wheel.
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when you do
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they'll come around - -
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one of them
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whistling marriage
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like a willing
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oedipal
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mother
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until you acquiesce
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and then
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i promise you brother
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she carves you out
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like a cheap
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roadside
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pumpkin.
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25 Mar 08

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Very good point and poem.
 — MattPat

matt,

thanks for reading.

justin.
 — unknown

nice poem.
 — hank

tyler,

thanks for reading.

looks like you've been around a little in this life.

justin hyde.
 — unknown

HAHAHA!  Sucking in the cheeks.  Boy, we all fall for the easy little trick that will cause the opposite sex to flock to us!  

I thought it was pretending my contacts (which I didn't wear!) irritated my eyes, so I blinked a lot.  HAHAHA!  We are so stupid when puberty hits us between the eyes.
 — Isabelle5

28-30 are amazing. I love it.

thank you.
 — AtomBombJohn

Fun.
 — unknown

this and others.
 — hank

The last stanza is an absolute killer!  
 — PaulS

paul,
atom,
isabell,

thanks for reading.

j.
 — unknown

sucking in my cheeks made me look
very ugly in one old picture of me.
made no aesthetic difference anyhow.

can you laugh through your nose?

very nice, justin.
: )
 — fractalcore

this crawls under my skin.
 — amaviena

love it
 — poetbill

f,
a,
p,

thanks for reading.

j.
 — unknown

Very smart, observant writing.  A cheap roadside pumpkin, huh?  I'll drink 2 that.  At first, I thought you were talkin' about your ass cheeks, but then I realized you were referring to your face.  I'm in "slow mode" today.  Need more coffee...  Peace.  :-)
 — starr

ywah i liek it!
 — OKcomputer

nice poem. yes.

would you consider putting 'brother' in a line of its own?

i will buy your book as soon as i can, justin.
 — varun

varun,

thanks for reading... i consider everything, often pedantically vetting the variables until the moment has long passed...

take care,
justin.
 — unknown

So much truth and so painful that I have to thank you for adding humor.
 — cowork

good. nice diction. nice idea. well done.
 — fireballems

roadside pumpkin makes no sense.
 — unknown

heh, gritty.
 — CrudeEcstasy

I really genuinely like this.
 — Aziel

boring
 — unknown

ooppss
 — west-end

i slipped an fell
damn you
 — west-end

i like this one a lot... i can relate so easily, and it's sharp like a blade. plus, not too many words i don't know! very nicely done! fuck proper capitalization!
 — jacksonic

It's like teen angst all over again
 — jacksonic

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