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whiff
hank

when i breathe deep
 1
it seldom hurts but
 2
still makes me think
 3
even though i have a few
 4
good years left
 5
that inevitably you must
 6
be left alone
 7
when i was young one thing that scared me
 8
out of two
 9
was the thought that i might never find love
 10
or be loved
 11
now
 12
it is the knowledge of leaving a love behind
 13

27 Mar 08

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Good but would be much better with punctuation.  Point well made but not beautifully made.  
 — Isabelle5

So beautiful, so true, so painful. I want to adopt this poem
 — unknown

the title is not very good. this poem reads easily and the concept is cute but has been used before and unfotunately i knew where it was going at line 10. the verb is line 14 is awful.
 — raskolniikov

why whiff ?
 — unknown

ok raskol.
 — hank

lovely poem, hank.
 — varun

Got it  = what if
 — unknown

I really liked this a lot :) Good stuff!!
 — psychofemale

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