| Head Lice
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larrylark
| A blind minutiae | 1 |
dances in careless abandon | 2 |
along a hair. | 3 |
He’s been combed out of bed, | 4 |
landed from his comfortable lair, | 5 |
fish out of water, | 6 |
forced to parade outside the shade, | 7 |
in bold sunshine where he slows, | 8 |
half way comatose, while previous life is sought. | 9 |
Realisation then strikes, been extracted | 10 |
like a growth beneath the surgeons knife. | 11 |
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Tries to pretend its not come to an end, | 12 |
this intrepid tight rope walker | 13 |
balances, stalks along one jettisoned strand, | 14 |
as he's tossed into the bin, | 15 |
his fine and glossy lifeline lost. | 16 |
Paid the price for each and every bite, | 17 |
searches for sustenance among today’s debris, | 18 |
choking as he tries to flea. | 19 |
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13 Apr 08 |
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ha ha. i had lice when i was nine, they were the size of rats.
— raskolniikov
Some of the clearest, tightest writing i've seen on this site. You should be proud.
— joshcoops
funny. and great poem
this intrepid tight rope walker, if it's meant literally, altho a great expression, may not be accurate, since their small world is just as big as ours, on another scale.
loved it, turns to human condition in the end.
— unknown
Way funny
— themolly
if jooshcops says you should be proud, hey, who are we to argue?
or is that cooshjops or .... never mind...... his pomes are really really
— unknown
Head lice are the fastest expanding species currently on the planet as they have found a way to modify their genetic blue print so that they can feed off wigs and hair pieces.
Larry licensed to kill Lark
— larrylark
Hi Joshcoops
Never proud, just trying to get on with writing the next one
Larry busy as a busy bee Lark
— larrylark
i had lice, too, when i was small,
Larry excellent work as usual Lark.
: )
— fractalcore
larry you've a singular style and wit writ within it -- the end is a wondrous play and the imginitive nit picking is hilarious --
— AlchemiA
Hi raskolniikov
I once shared an apartment with a rat who thought he was a head lice as he always liked being out in fresh air.
Larry lame jokes lark
— unknown
hi larry,
it's surgeon's knife and not like you wrote it... and "it's" on line and not...
Apart from that, i like the idea of a poem...
— greenmantle
Dear themolly
I'm so pleased this little ditty amused you. Round my neck of the woods we are under constant threat from the pesky little creatures.
Larry itchin' an' bitchin' lark
— larrylark
You remind me of the modern day Ogden Nash without all that constant forced rhyming. The end line is your typical crazy sense of humor and it shines right through. I love your poetry, Larry I wonder what shampoo he's using Lark. I love YOU too! :-)
— starr
Larry, thank you so much for making me laugh. it does indeed pick up at the end with the brilliant line sixteen, and good usage of flea ...
you had lulled me so peacefully in the first stanza, and i think that calmness helped the humor stand out even more.
i love the humor. perhaps that may ironically not sound lovely, as there is no use in repeating oneself when the obvious has already been said,
but. this is a great piece. your words are so pleasant and perfect. that is hard to do. eh, not for you, but ... well ...
— listen
oh, and i forgot to point out the effectiveness of those little twe ak s. they didn't put a gap in the quality of the poem at all.
you know what i'm talking about, of course; please keep doing that. it is ever so grand, and that ain't sarcastic.
— listen
Hi fractalfore
I also had small lice when i was big.
Larry large Lark
— unknown
Dear starr
I remind myself of Graham Nash the high pitched crooner with The Hollies and Crosby Still et al espec. when I'm in the bath and squeezing my testicles to reach the high notes
Larry golden balls Lark
— larrylark
AWESOME
funny as hell (the flea)!
I hate lice.
Great, now I'm itchy!
thanks larry.
— jenakajoffer
Love the play on words with "fleas". Nicely done.
~Daisy Jones
— unknown
It's a bit dull really...
— Linnac
Dear Linnac
Of course its dull to have head lice but they love shiny hair, sliding down as if they were on a helter skelter. Feel free to give me as many 1's as you please and never mistake me for a guy who gives a fuck
Larry keeper of small pets Lark
— larrylark
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