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succulents
hank

there are these little plants
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fleshy leaves if you can
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call them that but flowers too
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i can tear them and place them
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elsewhere
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among the stones
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but really i am more gentle than that
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they seem more human than most others
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slow growing and persistent
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color
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but if you look closely
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they also bud overnight
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very living
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they call them sedum
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and stone something
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and all sorts of names
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25 Apr 08

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Love succulents. Always have. My mom got the floral garden gene. ILOVEDIRT. I have it too. It just hasn't bloomed yet ;) Nice words. I'd add punctuation. Great anyway.
 — themolly

Nice poem, except for the "but really" trying to push me out of it. That bit is rather annoying.
 — DeformedLion

thanks but it's my voice speaking to the person i'm speaking to.
 — hank

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