| The Book
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nisetru
| the book announced to be | 1 |
captivating, | 2 |
the book with the back cover | 3 |
eaten by a mouse. | 4 |
and as it opened | 5 |
sucked me in | 6 |
through invisible gates | 7 |
and i wandered | 8 |
upon its rows of small | 9 |
black dots and lines and curves | 10 |
each word a color | 11 |
each color a sunset | 12 |
thoughts i used to think | 13 |
and a name that wasn't my own. | 14 |
days went by | 15 |
and i owned its story | 16 |
and followed its paths | 17 |
and glided | 18 |
and flew | 19 |
and returned to testify | 20 |
against the loss of | 21 |
innocence. | 22 |
the book was captivating, | 23 |
its every word pulling me | 24 |
further in its silken labyrinth. | 25 |
i've eaten its flesh | 26 |
like a child eating peaches | 27 |
and i fell asleep | 28 |
still holding it | 29 |
between my fingers. | 30 |
stepped off daylight | 31 |
the sound of heartbeat | 32 |
the smile of triumph | 33 |
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and i woke up | 34 |
throwing it away | 35 |
as if it were a black spider | 36 |
climbing on my finger | 37 |
weaving dreams | 38 |
between eyelids and its smooth skin | 39 |
the book with the back cover | 40 |
eaten by a mouse | 41 |
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captive | 42 |
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30 Apr 08 |
Rated 9.1 (9) by 11 users.
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welcome back, nice poem.
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— fractalcore
really nice. i like the images a lot, your message is awesomely ironic.
— listen
Thank you
— nisetru
no problem.
please keep posting. i beg of you.
— listen
This is chock full of imagery, it gives me this really hard-set cloying sensation, like a song in minor, maybe waking up to this song after having woken up from a dream of deceased lover.
Nisetru, I would bear your children if you promised to write more and more and more forever and ever. ):
— Aziel
Good books are an amazing tool for relaxation. I've only recently started reading for enjoyment. I think, while attending high-school, being force-fed someone else's idea of good books really put a damper on my desire to read. Well, that and perhaps a few other priorities. I'm not sure I can make your connection to the curves of the rows, unless you are referring to how the lines are of different length and seem to curve in and out as you go down the page. This seems to be a more obvious detail in poetry than in most books however.
— rrjcarleton
--this gathers us to the feelings in imagery that a good book can transport us to a new layer of reality/imagination that stretches us -- and that can be a little scary to our appropriate cultivated self -- we are Dream catchers and co-creators and imagine is the first step to the immortality of dreams --
— AlchemiA
nice :)
— markfelician
i am not happy that you deleted all your poems!
— raskolniikov
rrjcarleton: i was referring to paragraphs or to the shapes of letters; on the other hand, still, in school usually we're given to read good books, but of course, just a small amount of the great diversity there is..
listen: i will for sure
AlchemiA: yep :) books are great for dreaming, imagination, vocabulary, ideas, enjoying and relaxation.
markfelician: thank you
raskolniikov: me either. as a result, puttin them back.. :)
— nisetru
The never ending stooooorrrry! I love that movie. J/K. Nice poem. There's nothing that can compare to a child's imagination and a good book.
— grneyeddevil
that is a lovely movie indeed
Thanks
— nisetru
what does that mean.....'the book announced to be/captivating'?
such strange, unnecessary wording
— unknown
You got me reading again---in a metaphorical way. Good read!
— basketballj
reading books should always be as magical as this..
— adonispillow
really nice concept and nice structure, pulled off well
however, 'invisible gates', 'each color a sunset', 'loss of innocence', 'silken labyrinth', and 'weaving dreams' are a touch too cliched or over-used for me
— unknown
glad for the repost
we've nothing if not time
— chuckle_s
Wow...I, much like rrjcarleton was force-fed a lot of stuff in my 12 years of school that just didn't interest me. In fact, I pretty much did Cliff Notes throughout my entire Junior and Senior years in high school just to graduate by the skin of my teeth. I, too, need to read to relax, but have been so turned off to it since being a kid that it's going to take some time. I'm glad I'm not the only one in the universe that's experienced this. I remember having chickenpox when I was 7 in the 2nd grade. The teacher sent home 10 books and I got overwhelmed by that and subsequently uninterested. I just read the Natalie Cole Story (Angel on My Shoulder) from cover to cover. I can relate now to that feeling of getting sucked in/held captive. Amen. It only took 44 years!
— starr
I liked it! The flow of words with thoughts trailing behind were quite good.
The rambling descending tumbled down the hill of this poem.
— ThankfulS
captivating! capturing language/power as borges, pervasive, ordering, unraveling like an accordion of color and taste, as vibrating chaos of dynamic circumstance
keep posting!
— aleksandr
fantastic!! like the person before me i too hope u keep writing because it was very interesting and thrilling
— onyx12098
I am curious about "the book announced to be captivating." Did you leave out 'itself" or something else? Announced what to be captivating? That line is not complete.
Is it possible to put a period end of line 7 so that you can drop the 'and' from the beginning of line 8? You could do that with a lot of lines here, it becomes very 'run on,' the bane of 8th grade English classes.
The story line is good. The presentation, because of no white space and too many 'ands' is weaker than it needs to be. This can be smartened up with only a little work.
— Isabelle5
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