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Transcendence
PaulS

A group of roses
 1
bunched together—
 2
such a pretty sight
 3
to see.
 4
 
 
To their side
 5
one stands alone—
 6
beauty magnified
 7
in simplicity.
 8

29 May 08

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very nice poesy :)

trips off the tongue
 — Mongrol

Thanks Mongrol :)
 — PaulS

This is just a happy, sweet poem, for no other reason than one thought to write it down, thank you for this one!
 — sherains

Thanks for the compliment sherains :)
 — PaulS

simple and lyrical -- a little crystal making many reflections --
 — AlchemiA

Thanks for the kind comment AlchemiA.
 — PaulS

the sparing quality in here is very effective.

nice work.
 — listen

Thanks for reading, listen.
 — PaulS

I like it alot, though when I think of one rose standing alone beside a group, I think "individuality", rather than simplicity. Just my humble view :)
 — mindbodysoul

Thanks mindbodysoul, for reading and for your thoughts.
 — PaulS

the only one, alone but not lonely, seeing things
[more] clearly than all the others combined.

thanks, poet.
: )
 — fractalcore

Thanks fractalcore--for reading and for your take on the metaphor.
 — PaulS

there definetely needs to be a beat after magnified. as in a pause.

but, for me, i automatically rest on the following "in"...so maybe not.

i like this, as i recall, i liked it before.
 — DeformedLion

i like how you have replaced the use of words in lines 1 and 2.
isnt that called something?
 — trochee

Not sure what you mean trochee, but I'm glad you like it.
 — PaulS

"what's in a name? that which we call a rose By any other name would smell as sweet"   Romeo and Juliet,   Act II scene II,   "Shakespeare"  i came here for a fresh smell on a sunday afternoon... j.g. smiles
 — goeszon

Still love this and all it's Emily Dickenson splendor ( -:
 — sherains

Great images top to bottom with a strong ending.  Nice work.
 — unknown

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