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platte bum blues.
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nineteen-years
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and eternity have all summed up
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to screwball hair
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    and deadpan posture, tend'rest of
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    touch as supple
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    and seamless as
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flower bundles.
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-and even yet:
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o hopelessness! elastic ennui that sticks
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and shifts– but for those
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                 platte river bums
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                 posted about the trail of
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                 stench
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      sewer filth
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and plastic disparagements,
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they do not experience a lethargic spike– no,
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only instinct slews them
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over time as they wear
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their shredded jackets
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tennis shoes
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and ragged backpacks.
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the wind ungulates my flabby limbs,
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      my flaccid youth,
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      all too young to decline or wilt
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      or grow cobwebs
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      in my armpits.
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-but for all those bearded men,
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        trading goods
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        and losing spirit:
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coincidentally roaming
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the nether trail past the
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cemetery,
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                they've lost their
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                vigor (if they've had any)
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                unlike i–
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only riding to and fro,
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gazing at them
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as they gazed back.
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8 Jun 08

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Nice poem. Check out mine called A message to americans
 — MattPat

Try keeping your back straight.
 — Cerulise

Just read it. It's one of the best poems I've ever read. Seriously, you're amazing.
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