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nisetru
| I would run the marathon | 1 |
just to be close to you | 2 |
put my trust upon a white dove | 3 |
I would run over hurdles | 4 |
of beguiling foreign things | 5 |
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27 Jun 08 |
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i would if i could.
thanks for reposting.
: )
— fractalcore
I like this. It's sweet, romantic and to the point. I might insert a comma at the end of L2, a period at the end of L3 and begin a new strophe with L4; this would make better use of white space in my humble opinion.
— starr
Oops. Forgot to smile at you today. :-) There we go!
— starr
i like it, sweet and short, but full of meaning
— Odin
so few words, such a big message. you did beautifully. this gave me chills.
~m
— brokenarrows
so nice to read this again.
: )
— fractalcore
please post another poem.
— raskolniikov
i like the last two lines a lot.
— amandapunch
this is sooo simple it has purity in the intent and delivery -- human integrity in the write and a loving heart!
— AlchemiA
cool poem.
after seeing fractals comment i would change the title to : i would if i could.
— trochee
Beautiful
— larrylark
Like it!
— tiny
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