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Left Lost
Enimie2

Stars light up
 1
         go out
 2
Everyone's going home
 3
 
 
Day has fainted
 4
Standing alone
 5
              alone
 6
Wishing I wasn't afraid
 7
                     in the dark
 8
Keep crawling in the dark
 9

I started writing again, after a year or so (see account : Enimie) . So please be mild, this is some stuff i wrote yesterday, I listened to Radiohead - In Rainbows all day, so it's probably a bit Radiohead influenced, perhaps these are more proper as lyrics, not poems, but comments are always welcome

4 Jul 08

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For me, the sparseness & shape is appealing. From standing in darkness to tentative movement. I would be tempted to play with  standing -  wishing -  crawling.
 — samstone

Could you give an example?
 — Enimie2
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