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memory/resolution
Aziel

reasons without reason
 1
can complicate things
 2
for god and the devil--
 3
 
 
today
 4
 
 
the devil sharpened cumulus
 5
and hid them in the freezer
 6
for a sunny day
 7
 
 
it has me at the brim of my wits
 8
waiting to spill
 9
if only for some sort of
 10
r e l e a s e
 11
 
 
it's explosion without laughter
 12
consistently, persistently
 13
swallowing me
 14
like a field of hungry mouths,
 15
digesting the essence
 16
of every dream i've had of you
 17
 
 
shitting it out,
 18
in the form of empty futures,
 19
bitter denial, and dirty dishes
 20
flows
 21
like ice cream on a winter evening
 22
 
 
tomorrow
 23
 
 
i tape my mouth shut
 24
and build my houses from dung
 25
I have always been one point short from perfect
 26

8 Jul 08

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bump
 — unknown

love your picture

does time have a face?
 — unknown

very nicely-put.
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 — fractalcore

you begin with the percept that duality ever plays a game -- you use the old language then stretch it to form around your realEYESation that all this devilry is pathetic and impermanent and man made -- listening to the language only the heart can hear -- speaking without tongues is the summative strophe and well made at that -- we are one and all perfectly fractally flaw'd --
 — AlchemiA

fools build their houses from sticks, lesser fools build theirs from dung.
 — unknown

Wow!  Aziel, this is extremely good writing.  The last three lines are top-notch.
 — PaulS

:3 thanks!
 — Aziel

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