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outsider
hank

theoutsiderformedfromsmalltown
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similarcreationsbyhimformed
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fishingdepththatdidnotteach
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willowptarmigancomplexity
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couldclimbedtoasteppenwolf
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wasoutsidetheshoresofmexicopullingup
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longlinesthatstretchedallthewayacross
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outsidertalkstohimselfliketaffy
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conversationstretchedcontinually
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conversationthatislogicallycontinued
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outsideristryingtomakesenseofthesilly
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thingshethoughtaboutyousohethinks
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1 Aug 08

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hmm,isthisacandidateforthemostannoyingpoem
contest?allthewordsarespelledoutcorrectlyandthe
authormadesurenospacewasleftbetweenthewords.

verynicemove,actually,poet.thiscouldmakeanoutsider
ofthereaderandanannoyedoneatthat.iwastemptedto
doabroken-word-retort-typebutchangedmymind.

mustbethecaseofabrokenspacebaronthekeyboardand
youwillhavetorunoutsidetotheneareststoreforareplacement.

inotherwords,ilikeit.
: )
 — fractalcore

thankyou.
 — hank

youactuallyreadit!
 — hank

this poem is difficult to read, but worth the effort it takes to get inside it.
 — SilverGirl

i read line 17 as she then he and it threw me at first

Never heard of a willow ptarmigan,

In the mountains of Honshū, Japan, the Ptarmigan is called raichou (literally "thunder bird") and according to legend protects people and buildings from fire and thunder.

Over the next few weeks Hermine introduces Harry to the indulgences of what he calls the "bourgeois": she teaches Harry to dance, introduces him to the casual use of narcotics, finds him a lover, and forces him to accept these as legitimate and worthy aspects of a full life.

What a great girl.
 — unknown

very difficult but i love a challenge. good experimental poem.
 — raskolniikov

What precisely are you trying to convey by using this format?  I'm hoping you had a reason for it, rather than simply writing a strong poem?
 — Isabelle5

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