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Incredible Lurk

it's really nice to be in this DreamSeaLand.
how's your reading of the book or Rand's?
well, you never change, buddy.
you're a green dormant computer who's OK
till we/you blow your top and your brain
muscles pop away in a fit revealing your wit
tearing your dress apart, doing your
part in the dialog, or monologuing your asss...
...sssumptions on a well-thought day or
mindfullesst like the FUCKLEWIT atlas
rebuilding the old new world by the simplest
gesture of a shrug for all the fucklewit-wannabees
to thrive in, riding the lightning motor of [r]evolution
so incessantly
you stay/go/lurk, girl.
[w]i'll keep the green light on for you.

written 07/14/08

for OKcomputer.
thanks, buddy.
: )

3 Aug 08

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OKcomputer truly deserved a poem to be dedicated to. I like it very much, it flows nicely, has got double meaning and humor, and last line is awesome.
 — nisetru

thanks so much, nisetru.
every poet deserves a poem written for them, right?
: )
 — fractalcore

or him or her.
: )
 — fractalcore

this must've the wrong OKcomputer [IP] address.
shall i return it to sender?
: )
 — fractalcore

i finally found it ;)
 — OKcomputer

i'm glad.

so how do/did you find it?
: )
 — fractalcore

very cool stuff. check line 5/6, then click on ok profile before it changes; nifty happenstance that!
 — chuckle_s

thanks, chuckle_s.

yeah, i notice that, too. skull is a curious thing: why is it
even there? hmm, and do you notice her last two poems'

gun is too cliche a friend nowadays, i think.
maybe we all should try to do a hannibal on ourselves sometime.
: )
 — fractalcore