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Critically Dissected All-New Fable
netskyIam

Once upon
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(we modern critics won't allow upon; the up is spurned, superfluous)
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Try again
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Once on a time
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(?)
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Begin again if common sense must rule
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Once upon a time a maiden smiled up at the Sun
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(we wonder if she wasn't blinded)
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She spoke
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"About your warmth and superb light—
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why do you clearly favour me and make me feel alive like this?"
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The Sun saw and said nothing for reply
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______
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read aloud:
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http://tinyurl.com/6zqb3m
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20 Aug 08


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