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Easy Tiger
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The spoons lie half forgotten in cans of corn
 1
Slips of pink paper slid under the door just diplomas of this domain
 2
Though the cold never seeps through the nest of blankets in the corner
 3
Bowie-Knife carvings on a wooden cable spool—the table
 4
Where it stabs through a nihilistic manifesto—evolved
 5
From thirty-nine years of too many funerals and too little love
 6
 
 
But what can sere boy’s-homes breed
 7
When the bills break to pennies still singed in grime
 8
the machine looses count—
 9
And Identity dies
 10
 
 
Seeds and stems from yesterday’s pot
 11
litter cigarette burns on a stolen plane blanket—
 12
stuffed in the cushions of a futon that cant afford sleep
 13
except tempests tossing in early light
 14
he says an artist must live his religion
 15
so the knife cuts what cannot break
 16
with so dull a blade and broken handle
 17
 
 
easy tiger, this Sun will set
 18
when politicians loose there sordid gamble
 19
and in the fall land on your couch
 20

14 Sep 08

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 — unknown

yep read it and loved it .. so much grief and loss of self - this view, this oversation of things in the surrounding trying to tag them with meaning, the value of a life... it works.. though there are a few spots here and there could do with a tighten..

line 5 - no need for the word 'through' - also use spaces on the hyphen -

spelling line 19 - there should be their

though over-all I like the grimness of this, the cynical veiw of the world and life..
 — Mongrol

L19-lose and their not loose and there.  Otherwise, very poignant and sad.  I can relate to this.  11-20 are really well written.  I would put an apostrophe in L13 too into the contraction "can't" and question why in L16 that you use the whole word, "cannot."  I like this a lot.  :-)
 — starr

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