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Killee
larrylark

He lived in Killee
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loved the good life,
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danced with an heiress
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in the dead of the night.
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The one street was his,
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its bhoyos were grand,
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Mary Madonna?
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Stick a coin in her hand.
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He drank from a fountain,
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swam in cool streams,
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walked under moonlight
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to tap a rich seam.
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He lived in Killee
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as young man and old,
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his coffin was carried
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through the tales that he'd told,
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of a faraway sea shore
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that lapped round a bay,
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there were tears in his eyes
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as he faded away.
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19 Sep 08

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This is very good in story and power and structure, but could use work on the language and some of the rhymes.
 — technomancer

Story power structure language rhymes, what the hell do i know?

Larry don't knpw Lark
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