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OKcomputer

Gansi crossed ol' God with shoe-scuffs
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& woke up his eyes: "there is a flat rubber planet
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beneath yr feet. Get off it."
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He aimed himself away
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& began building longer shins
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and a tower.
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Sad day - when he came to absorb new truths:
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yeah they're goina werk ya dry.
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papa says it gets worse all the time.
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Elevators don't work for the heaven-bound.
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Come to think of it you won't.
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You kint jes write fer pleasure.
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Awful sorry about that.
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& with a nerve crack he forgets:
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-how it felt to dream good dreams
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-where it come from to write nice thoughts
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-how to access my child mind
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-what it felt like to be free
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Gansi took up prayin aginn 'cept --
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this time there was nobody on th' other end.
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He felt like a fool but he was always a fool.
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A fool to dream 'imself into a wedge
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& a fool to repair 'imself by admitting.
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He did consider settin' his good mind free.
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5 Oct 08

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something left you. genius departed. you are lost to yourself and it shows.
 — unknown

thank you, old friend. i know it already, and i don't like it. its not easy to will it forward.

i needed to hear it from someone other than myself. thank you. i will spend some time addressing it.
 — OKcomputer

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