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Hot Air
larrylark

I am hot air,
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blown to within
 2
an inch of my skin.
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One pin is all it takes
 4
for a prick to go bang
 5

16 Oct 08

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bang.

but, why not write a poem if you're that sensitive. bang. bang-bang.
 — geckodrome

Are you having treatment for repetative comment syndrome?

Weasel Words
 — unknown

God, does Geckodrome ever do anything but nancy about trying to swat flies on this board?

Tommy Rot
 — unknown

Gekodrome can't even swat his own flies. No buzz from him

Will Gnat
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Very nice.
 — unknown

THanks

Larry Helium Lark
 — larrylark

this is so clever. i break a smile with this. (again.)
 — listen

is this joey's biography?
 — unknown

Its Geekodrone's air bag pumped by heat
 — unknown

Dear Listen

I always value your comments

Larry
 — unknown

Joey

Never heard of him
 — unknown

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