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another cliched love poem
silentspring

what? another love poem
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written to the sorrowful tune
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of forever-gone kisses
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and lingering hopes
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of a rekindled affair
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another few lines filled with
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the sweet smell of her hair
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those prominent muscles of his
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the way she fit within his
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broad shoulders
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another sad stanza
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about mistakes caught
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too lateā€¦ always too late
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for forgiveness
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another few moments
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wasted by words
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of beautiful eyes, sorrowful eyes
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tears streaming down faces
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like those fountains
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hidden behind ivy strangled walls
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lost in gardens of sweet flowers
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what? another love vanquished
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by the disreputable force
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of fate, perhaps, intertwined with
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romantic intrigue of another.
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another forgotten face
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paused for a moment
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as lost eyes gaze blankly, searching,
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trying to remember
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what they always had wanted
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to forget
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what?
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more wasted time
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on another cliched love poem
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20 Oct 08

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i love it
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 — deadwinter

yeah!! the ramboling way u did it...fking great! Its 2 poems in 1! The beginning and end, and the ramboling structure r fully anti-love poem. The body is a love poem other love poems should b jealous of. I would say its perfectly done. Except maybe a comma after "another" in 24. I was thinkin u might b right, cus it should b a period and u have no periods, which is gd. i dunno
 — peoplescareT

i really like this! great job!
 — nickiblitz

But it is just that: another cliched love poem.  And that's OK, I guess; there is no law against such things, though, if I were King, I'd hack 'em all up and burn them to ashes: these poets, not just their poems (I am kidding....I'd only draw and quarter the cliche-ing poets, ha ha)
 — netskyIam

mind reading "If I could right this..." again? U saw it the way it was before, and i made a ton of changes...
 — peoplescareT

thanks peoplescareT. any other comments?
 — silentspring

enjoyed this
well written!
not what I was expecting at all...
 — shards

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