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Drug House
larrylark

She fell forward from the house,
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her baby followed, maimed by indifference.
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The shriek and shout of that universe inside
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shifted down the street.
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At least some hand had remembered to strap it in.
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"Mummy, Mummy!"
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The soother was sucked beneath the seat.
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No one bothered to tell her;
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now they were both screaming.
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14 Nov 08

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i like this a lot. the meaning is pleasantly obscure. either that or i missed the point. in any case i like the way this reads. has your touch of humor, but conveying something serious, as indicated by the title, the strong lines, etc.

nice work.
 — listen

so what
 — unknown

dear listen

Its about despair and desperation that seperates people from what is beneficial and plunges them into a world of degregation.

Larry social worker Lark
 — larrylark

Dear Unknown

You post modern existentialist view on this situation does you proud.

Larry pre modern Lark
 — larrylark

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