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A Taste of Time
starr

We touch upon the past
 1
for a melancholy moment,
 2
have a taste of time;
 3
 
 
It's more about ego than anything else
 4
and we ring hollow-
 5
 
 
Love lives on
 6
so forgiveness may follow.
 7

For J. Langley, 2006.

17 Nov 08

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Artistically told tale of love and loss.  Did this person die or just move on in his life?  That waterfall line somehow makes me think of death.
 — Isabelle5

A few minor changes-switched around a few prepositions.  Happy New Year, every-1.  :-)
 — starr

happy nu-year Starr :-)
 — unknown

We both moved on, however, we both exposed one another to new kinds of lifestyles, which was ultimately and mutually beneficial.  Of course, he won't admit it, but I've realized it early on.  :-)
 — starr

This is really, really good, starr.  Diction is right-on.  Stanza 4 really struck a chord--it's placed perfectly.  write on man, write on:)
 — PaulS

Thanks, Paul!  I hope you have a great 2009, and yes, I will "write on" (at least I HOPE to.)  I think I need a break for a few months.  My best to ya, buddy!  :-)
 — starr

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