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Howling at the Moon
Aziel

"i ate your grandmother.

sorry.

want to be friends?"


having been raised by
 1
                               the wolf,
 2
        i have
 3
                       learned
 4
[to mimic] the things
 5
that those who are loved
 6
get to learn
 7
 
 
                 like how to smile in a photograph
 8
and
 9
                    how to pick the best avocados
 10
 
 
he wants/thinks
 11
"we are two wolves in a cave"
 12
 
 
lunacy in closets
 13
pave way for [moonless] nights
 14
as he realizes
 15
i'm still
 16
  little red riding hood
 17
 
 
death rides a horse
 18
i'm racing him to the finish line
 19
                                                      
 20
 
 
                                                     in green stilettos
 21
 
 
"the wolf has fallen in love with you,
 22
i've eaten your grandmother, and i'm sorry
 23
i don't have to do the bad thing
 24
i'll satiate my hunger
 25
with your basket of goodies."
 26

26 Nov 08

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i hate the HTML blockers on this website.
 — Aziel

haha
nice poem and funny
i think the consistency of approach is a real asset in this one. sometimes poems will have a tendency to jump around a bit as writers get ideas as they're writing, but this one has a real good focus to it, very pleasurably strong to read. i'll suggest maybe that line 11 wants thinks could be one feral-assed furball of a word if merged
nice words
 — chuckle_s

Haha, l11 was an editing error.  Thanks!
 — Aziel

bump.
 — Aziel

hey i like this one too very creative....
 — brother_sun

bump...
 — brother_sun

[cryptic]Hrmmm.... is it a coincidence.... well if it isn't, thank you.
[/cryptic]
Anyway, I'm not familiar with how to read this kind of poetry with the breaks it makes, the turns it takes...
 — UpAndDown

I like what you've done here, aziel.  It is very creative and, for me, works on many levels.
 — PaulS

sorry, i should've been more clear. i meant that wantsthinks would've been cool?
kwim?
 — chuckle_s

hey i wonder was this inspired by radioheads' wolf at the door?
 — brother_sun

if so i love it more!!!
 — brother_sun

Its more of film in my mind than a song, i really like line 13.. very clever.
line 7 throws me off a bit,
but ill just get used to it.
 — rainydaylove

What throws you off about it?
 — Aziel

I've experimented with the scattered, fashion magazine style and though I've moved past it, I still like it every once and awhile.
 — aurelius

bump
 — Aziel

bump bump
 — Aziel

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