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Retribution
larrylark

She felt real enough,
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as it all flickered through her,
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celluloid film reeled in and reeled out.
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On the  stair  where he kneels,
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struck dumb he can’t see her,
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with wife and her child
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he’s pretending to love.
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It’s a matter of fact when out in the cold
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You wait for the reckoning that never unfolds
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16 Feb 09

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there's something so amusing about a concluding couplet done just right. i can never quite place it. but you placed it here, all right, and i can't help but smile.

but it is still a serious poem, of course. and i like that. i do not mean to trivialize the piece in any way.

good to read your work. you always surprise.
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I am like life Listen
 — larrylark

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