this can take you away from there
remember why you use it
there is where you give away
here is where you get
here is where you rejuvinate
or at least can dream while awake
this we know is important
walk to dream or walk to see
24 Feb 09
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i think i know where your wanting to go with this, but not sure if it gets there and gets us there. I think perhaps you need to cut this down, minimalise it into the essential essence of what you think is the essence of you, and in doing so this will become a nice place for us all of to look into too.
unfortunately, or not, i can't change any of it.
nice conceit but i turns into don't judge until you've walked a mile for his camels kind of advertising. i don't want to remember rousseau. he's kind of long winded and preachy in the original. i'd rather remember peter orlovsky singing his simple songs and not telling us about the songs he likes to sing.
didn't know it did that, for you, gecko.
Rousseau was simply an image.
in my head.
humm, i think 'rousseau' is a kind of 'fish' in french. maybe you're channeling again.
well, if you are, then, green to green and red to...