| greedy bitch
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raskolniikov
| in the morning, | 1 |
the stomach | 2 |
is never grateful, | 3 |
for what it was fed | 4 |
the night before. | 5 |
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and neither is the cunt. | 6 |
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2 Mar 09 |
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Ah, a woman hater posts a poem. Comparing a woman's intimate parts to a stomach. I can't decide if this is a man who hates women or a woman who thinks laughing at her body will get her points.
Remove the , from line 3, it is not needed there. I'm interested to see what others think of this. My feeling is usually that if a poet must use the C word, they are out of words.
— Isabelle5
HAHAHAHAHA! Now I know....
— Isabelle5
This is kind of clever and I like it's blunt brevity.
I think this could have been written by a woman. A woman comfortable with her sexuality, her appetites, herself. I have no problem with cunt. It is just another word, like any other. How we perceive it, of course, depends greatly on how we've heard it used or if it's been directed at us personally, from a negative place.
I hope this piece gets a lot of comments. I'm most curious to see how it's perceived by other readers.
— sybarite
I like this. It's straightforward and honest. It's also true most of the time. But I'd change the title to just Greed.
— majan
I love this. I think "cunt" is the only word to end this poem. It seems natural.
PS. I'd vote on "Greedy".
— Lexie
I knew this one belonged to you Raskol. Cunt, Cunt, Cunt.
— unknown
written by a true cunt
— unknown
always more more more...........
observation well taken
— unknown
poets
— unknown
mucho hambre senor......
— Liliana
z cunt is hungry
— Liliana
A recognition of women as sexual animals is good. A disparagement of women as sexual animals ("greedy bitch" of the title, sense of women's passivity in the sexual act) is not so appealing. Is it considered sexual avarice when a guy is always up for it? I disagree with sybarite that a woman could have written this. A woman comfortable with her sexual appetites wouldn't see it this way :-)
smugz
— unknown
I have to disagree smugzy. I am a woman who is comfortable with her sexual appetites. Being direct to the point of bluntness is also something I'm comfortable with, so I can easily see this as having been written by a similar minded woman.
— sybarite
but it was written by a cunt-hating man, nimrod!
— unknown
Dearest Unknown
I said, "could" have been written by a woman. At no place did I state it "was" written by a woman. I can only assume you are still in high-school as you are still in the name-calling phase of your development. Won't it be nice for everyone when you've grown out of it.
— sybarite
repost or plagerism?
Had a better effect on me last time I read it. Seemed less awkward before...hm.
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— peoplescareT
oops thought this was on the newest list. Sorry=)
— peoplescareT
Yes, syb, I see where you're coming from. I'm fine with direct to the point of bluntness too :-)
I just feel this has more of the quality of a text message in that you're not sure what tone it's intended to be read in. It could be read in several different ways - humorous, sarcastic, caustic, angry.
— smugzy
a Raskolnikov poement -- neither does the kok remember its last stroke of in-sight, bursting into wet dream, rather the memories are stories we tell ourselves in the morning making jocular remarks and other hunters noises while smirking in the mirror and smelling our fingers for the scent ;)
— AlchemiA
You see, Alch's comment made me laugh out loud. There is that tenderness that frames the bluntness.
smugz
— unknown
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