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Dreaming of Flight
larrylark

Once upon a while I can fly;
 1
not too far, one hop, step at a time, and then  jump
 2
away from my front door,
 3
hardly achieving float beyond the porch.
 4
 
 
Coated as I am in flesh,
 5
pressed by gravity towards feats of clay,
 6
I consider an achievement remains
 7
leaping in a state of perspiration,
 8
while dodging pouring rain, wondering whether
 9
to regain Acacia Avenue,
 10
landing back on my well worn terrain
 11

12 Mar 09

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nice, Larry. very nice.

i especially like the space between the last two words of line two, being a fan of your slight manipulations of conventions.

like the internal rhythm. works well here, especially around the last few lines.
 — listen

Thanks listen

I always like to give a poem space to breathe

Larry breathless lark
 — larrylark

Love this! I have experienced the reality of flying , or thought i have, but it turns out I'm generally asleep at the time. Today I am weighted in mud, nowhere near flying. regards ani
 — crimsonkiss

Thanks ani

In my dreams i fly everywhere and when i wake up i am amazed that i am still sleeping.

Larry half awake Lark
 — larrylark

Love it, as usual you put humour into it and put out a really well written poem, love L5&6. One suggestion for L2 - period after far "I hop, one step at a time" instead, as the reader sorta falls over your hop where it commas into a step!
 — angrychick

I love to fly in my sleep, it's my favourite dream.
 — angrychick

Thanks for your comments angry chick, I always look forward to hearing from you

Larry across the sea Lark
 — larrylark

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