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Johnny Loves Jo (Briefly)
larrylark

Golden graffiti composed upon brick,
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each letter linked by the first ray of sun.
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Creatures of night put love in this place,
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brush head and turpentine sees that its gone.
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26 Mar 09

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this would work even better as a haiku?

you could show more rather than tell (the parentheticals removed and the last line implied type of thing)

lovely . . . ephemeral . . .



thank you
 — unknown

yes, love is ever so. there but then, as if every now only exists to be driven over by a prostitutes blood-soaked heel...mean bitch this thing we call life.

and thus ends the lesson.

kind of good poem.
 — DeformedLion

I love lovely ephemera and i see it in the mirror every morning

Larry self regarding Lark
 — larrylark

Dear DL

I take it the way it is and try to see the best that each person is

Larry holy Joe Lark
 — larrylark

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