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strange girl
south fargo
says take me to ski
pub man says lets roost
by sea; taps me
with 'puter finger
virgin ripens apple
for baby sauce, reads erotic
poem through bi-
pokes my region
with thumb-tack,
says big lakes
make good meeting place
tricycle guy
plays game on me
'come to minnesota
you bake pie'
i say i've got no eye
for lesbian
and the other's too shy
for dating.

for Virginia, Karen and Pelican
and their ridiculous prank

23 Jan 10

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tehehehe, very cute. :D
 — Sequiturist

hehe, thanks Seq.
 — jenakajoffer

ps: i love me.

pss: you are ok too :)
 — DeformedLion

pps: pps. argh. bloody stupid brain which is brine/ i guess that what you are saying is that the koala is a nice animal and that cheney is the drake, he rapes he rapes !

the big pond! ha!
 — DeformedLion

what the hell are you talking about koalas for, linus.
you are ok too.  i'm stoked that you faved this, haha!
fun poems are fun to write.  
that's why i always liked writing about you and the buffalo.
 — jenakajoffer

as I have a fondness for lesbians of both sexes I found your poem to have an enthusiastic black-patch pirate-like on your eye while you thumbed-up the beckoning masses in their siren-song to all the lasses -- there is fatal-flaw in words that cat-call from these blog-o-sex boxes, and what's a girl to do: the urge to merge as the beginning of me, is often the end of you -- this needs to be said, however, and explored
 — AlchemiA

Haha. Well said, AlchemiA
 — laura352

haha, a lesbian of both sexes.  haha, pirate patch, that's great.
hi alch, thanks for reading.

btw, i only merge in my poetry.  =-)  
 — jenakajoffer


hi jen.

 — unknown

LOL.  'puter finger

This is fun, but the caveman diction threw me.
 — aurelius

unknown owns a copy of the troglydyte dictionary. maybe you can borrow it.
 — unknown

haha, the caveman diction is to showcase how impersonal and primitive this escapade was.
thx for the read mang.
 — jenakajoffer

awestruck and the depth of lines 7-10. Marvellous.
 — PaleHorse

thank you paleH,
though i do realize this poem is hardly understandable-- it'd be difficult to know unless you tried to e-date.pc.org, haha.

if it happened to me, it could happen to you. ;)
 — jenakajoffer

LOL, if this is how it goes....I may just have to try it.

...At least once.
 — PaleHorse

it will be an experience worth writing about at least. ;)
 — jenakajoffer

hahaha, oh man, just reminiscing the good old days.  there was inspiration everywhere, even when we didn't want it.
 — jenakajoffer

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