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Bride of Palestine
Bloodfetish

And I shall wear a suit
 1
of blood. Replace my wedding
 2
gown with Mother's ululation
 3
and the howl of widows.
 4
 
 
On my marriage day children
 5
shall be flowers scattered
 6
red in the streets, petals
 7
along my bridal path.
 8
 
 
Their fathers shall join my family
 9
scars: Only death confirms life.
 10
And I shall go to it before it
 11
comes to me. Revenge as I die.
 12

9 Feb 10

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You are wasting your time here. better off to split open a vein.
 — unknown

Well executed. No crits. No radicals here. Just a biting wit for a wedding present from the lab scientist.
 — NicMichaels

Wow...this is meaty.
very good.
 — mandolyn

WHO are you bloodfetish?
You have the flavor of someone I have read before.
 — unknown

i really enjoyed the line=breaks in this poem, and of course, the poem.
the first line introduces a sort of morbidity
but it is controlled,
shares a beauty and romance in dying.  i like how children are mentioned in L5, nice touch.  
i think you need a semicolon in L7, not a comma.

great read, thanks.
btw, how old is this one?
 — jenakajoffer

This is written with the passion of one willing to give their life for country--the song of a suicide bomber.
 — PaulS

umph - a flower of blood nourished by revenge - captivating write that sees with viscereality beyond the fatal-skin we're in
 — AlchemiA

Deep
 — psychofemale

Thank you for teaching me that listening is just important as talking
 — unknown

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