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sybarite
| From the white noise | 1 |
of blank paper | 2 |
a poet solicits | 3 |
sound for the soundless | 4 |
and pens the whisper of a curve, | 5 |
the pandemonium in a riot of curls | 6 |
or the jangle of injustice | 7 |
carried in the pockets of man. | 8 |
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A poet transcribes | 9 |
the staccato rattle in lonesome, | 10 |
the boom of loss | 11 |
and the cacophony of joy | 12 |
for those without the art | 13 |
to hear the weft | 14 |
and the kilter. | 15 |
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7 Mar 10 |
Rated 7.3 (7.7) by 6 users.
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Inactive (5): 1, 1, 3, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10
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LOVELY!
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— mandolyn
nice moves, great sentiment -- Poetry is the motion of emotion crafted into a language only the heart can hear, like music resonating in your brain, making it clear, that Love has no opposite, not even 'fear' -- musicality and internal rhythms, assonance and absurd schisms, a relentless word-play that has its say, the tongue licking your inner-ear, the heart torn by despair, an ancient-ache spilling from the pen, this is the Art of Poetry then ...
— AlchemiA
nicely written.....
enjoyed the words weft and kilter, they sound lovely......their use here is a bit confusing to me, unless I am not operating with the same definitions....
clever title
— Tandisol
Thank you all for reading and commenting, appreciated.
Tandisol--I used weft and kilter in reference to the "fabric of life" so to speak.
— sybarite
Oh, then that makes sense. Thank you for clarifying it for me. Sometimes colloquial phrases escape the usual dictionary definition understanding.
— Tandisol
simply beautiful
— Ansel
i was expecting something different from the title- thought this would be all gimmicky with funny little asides, but no, it is lovely/LOVELY! and without going into detail, well, i guess i'll just leave it there.
— DeformedLion
this is pretty much the kind of writing which makes people hate poetry -- people who read only for content, say... or, people who thought poetry was supposed to work on the imagination. it's the kind of work which gets you into some writers program in iowa and keeps you writing safe.
— bmikebauer
Never heard of "weft", but love this poem.
I wouldn't use "and" to start a line... just a suggestion. Usually the line can survive without it.
— aforbing
to make this work, i'd replace 'a poet' with 'I' and run with it -- take the world by the collar.
i solicit sound for the sleeper,
whisper curves on paper.
— bmikebauer
Thanks for the feedback everyone.
— sybarite
This is a wonderful, well crafted piece! You hooked me with the title and had me all the way through--this poem made my day!
— PaulS
Thank you PaulS, appreciate the feedback!
— sybarite
What a great title! That caught my attention and the rest of the poem kept me interested. Lines 9-10 are my favorite, I can feel them easily.
— Isabelle5
wonderful imagism and word choices! Nicey, nicey!
— jpmhawk
Isabelle and jpmhawk, many thanks for the read and feedback!
— sybarite
lovely poem. i enjoyed the way you've employed your words, so unique, refreshing.
i would only suggest not using 'poet' twice, and changing 'man' to 'men'.
cacophony for meaning is great, but i find the syllable count way too long for this line. in fact, a one syl word would imo, work best.
nice poem =-)
— jenakajoffer
Thanks jen, will consider some changes. Appreciate the feedback.
— sybarite
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