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Glitter and prayer
NicMichaels

A mother stuffs holidays
 1
with marshmallow chick sunshine -
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she wants you in Easter baskets all your life
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because
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                          outside the same porch,
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                                 on a different Sunday, comes
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the neighbor's family dog. His only vice
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actual rabbits
 8
 
 
un-seaming themselves
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in foil tufts. He proffers
 10
the soiling of real
 11
 
 
grass, you bury your pets
 12
with a popsicle-stick cross.
 13
Glitter, prayer. Adult
 14
 
 
curl a sermon of ribbon
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for little fingers to grab. But who can choose
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between holidays and dogs?
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30 Mar 10

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Comments:

This is good. I especially like the last stanza. =]
 — radiogirl

Nice contrasts to set up your message.  I like how you delivered this one.
 — Tandisol

This is different. I really like it
 — psychofemale

Thank you radiogirl, Tandisol, psychofemale.
 — NicMichaels

Intriguing poem well writ.  Brings to mind "Watership Down" for some reason.
 — JKWeb

=)
 — mandolyn

This is a great write.  You have the ability to take the simplist of life's moments and give them an edge.  You have a unique and special voice, poet.
 — PaulS

awestruck at the imagrey of 'curl(ing) a sermon of ribbon/for little fingers to grab'

Bravo
 — PaleHorse

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