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To Kill a Buzz
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Sitting on my stoop,
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Long hands dangled off my knees,
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A gentle breeze
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Combed strands of hair aside.
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I reflected. I smiled.
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I was high
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And the night behind
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Was full of love
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And that certain kind of laughter
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That lingers
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long after it's last cries.
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I let the THC drift my mind
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From topic to tangent with grace;
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A hawk that glides
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Across clear skies on summer days:
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“The city really is like a concrete jungle.
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That stray cat there’s like a lion—
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Or tiger, since he has stripes
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—Searching for food.
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A true solitary creature.
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That’s really cool—“
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“—Hmm, I haven’t played solitaire in awhile
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Mom used to play that game all the time.
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I haven’t talked to her in awhile,
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God, I love her.  I’ll call tomorrow—”
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“—I should pay my phone bill.
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I should cancel my plan with T-Mobile
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And switch to Verizon.
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That’s what I should do.
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Maybe I will”
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I didn’t see it—
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I heard the gunshot. So abrupt,
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And human screams erupted
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From an adjacent building,
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Chilling my warmth.
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I really like the concept behind this poem, but I'm not quite sure I have executed that concept near as well as I can.  Thoughts?

12 Apr 10

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I like this...how it switches subjects a lot
 — psychofemale

I think this is terrific, sincerely.  You took me into your warm, easy bent-ness, and I felt for you, when something destructive, assaulted your delicious no-thingness.  I'm giving this a 10 because I GOT it.  Excellent.
 — CervusWright

yes, modest and very deep.
 — manuka

Thanks guys!
 — joelala

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