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an elephant in the room
Mudd

a bright pink elephant plodded
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slowly out of its zoo enclosure
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past all the zoo visitors
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past the zoo keepers too
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(it had to slightly bow its head
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as it exited the zoo gates)
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it dodged traffic
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that did not stop for the wondrous sight
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as it crossed the street
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to the square opposite
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there, the elephant flexed its knees
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and jumped
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jumped so high, high above the zoo
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its shadow scudding across the city
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no one is startled (or hurt)
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as it landed, deftly, at my doorstep
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it plodded further, through the door
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squeezed itself up the stairs
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and slowly, silently, entered the room
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as we shared a hesitant kiss
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13 Apr 10

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i think he might have landed on my laptop else my LED is smashed itself to bits. nice write.
 — manuka

your name is mudd to me
 — unknown

Love this!!
 — psychofemale

And yours is unknown to me?
 — Mudd

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