Is this lyrics to one of your songs? I like it, especially "Tears are shed but there's a dought"
it does sound lyrical....i like it.
Thanks guys! I plan on making this a song in the near future :)
Much thanks again!!!
yes, these resemble lyrics, yes
Better as lyrics than poetry, this time. Poetry would not have to rhyme to make it work but as I am well aware, lyrics often demand a very stark and heavy beat throughout.
The angel shoots, gets hit by the dart is hysterical!
hehe thank you :) and you are rite, lyrics do demand that beat!! :D
i agrre w isabell funny line yes
This would never work as a song, there is too much starch in the meter and this would sound like old macdoonald's farm. with a shingy dingy here and a shingy dingy there.
bad bad bad to the bone
Anything that has
"tears are shed"
in the first stanza (or any stanza for that matter)becomes a murky, putrid swamp
I no longer wish to tread.
heeheeteehee. tread, shed. I can rhyme, too!
unfortunately, that does not = poetry.
that's why i sell a shit ton of my music :)
but i guess old macdonald did sell cuz hell everyone knows the words :)
you sell a shit ton? probably because they can't unsterstand it behind the screeching.
that made no sense...lol
what does unsterstand mean? i do not understand :O
I enjoyed this, very much.
thank ya very much! :D
are these the lyrics to a song ???
i love the first verse, kinda puts me mind mind of where I'm at with my fella at the mo :0)
yes, they are lyrics :D
you must take me for a fool. cause personally
i don't think you've got the fuel anymore.
and yes, we're probably still far too horsetile
the horsie's broken a leg, and the tiles are cracking up with laughter.
maybe change the last line to:
I had the fool
surely, you mean barf?
what in the fuck are you talking about....seriously?