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Cut out my kitchen window
NicMichaels

Keep the pie plate
 1
and give me back my time
 2
 
 
and we'll spoon the cherries
 3
out of the crust I shaped with nine fingers. I never needed
 4
 
 
ten to grasp: I wanted the clasp of two. You
 5
never came by, party-less,
 6
 
 
on a pretense of harrowing the field,
 7
and we didn't plant candles
 8
 
 
in celebration. I am washing potatoes.
 9
I am scrubbing my nails of you.
 10

14 Apr 10

Rated 7.5 (6.9) by 6 users.
Active (6): 7, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (4): 1, 2, 3, 3, 10, 10

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:) love this
 — psychofemale

Ooooh...domestic, crafty and right to the point.  Palmolive...you're soaking in it, Madge.  :-)
 — starr

I had to see who this was, so I came back and I'm a little surprised.  I thought it was gonnabe Isabelle!  LOL!  I LOVE L's 7 & 8, Nic!  Great little write!  :-)
 — starr

Okay. Next time I'll cook up a pigeon pie for ya. Why is it Sylvia Plath haunts all kitchen poems? Oh yeah: Stuck her head in an oven. Geez.
 — NicMichaels

The first two lines really set the tone for this piece and I find the images and metaphors of the poem sharp and crisp.  You could probably do without "and" in line 3, but that is a minor nit.  This is a well crafted piece of writing.
 — PaulS

Nic, thanks for bringing me to your poem!  It's so good.  I wish mine was as good as this.  Well done.  The potatoes in particular have special meaning to me.  I need to find my potato poem....
 — jenakajoffer

Thanks. Happens I wrote a potato poem recently, too. That's hilarious. It's freakin' stone soup at this point; please warn me if you smell the pilot light going off. I'd rather be alive than famous. I think.
 — NicMichaels

This poem is delicious!
:)
 — mandolyn

HeheheHHA, thats a good on' you go on an scrub you nails of her hun. and let us know the nixt tine you be poppin the cherry top!
 — unknown

I will warn you, Nic, no worries.  Though I haven't smelled anything strange today, nor am I dizzy.  pheww!
 — jenakajoffer

!!!!!!!!
 — NicMichaels

You can do the work in the kitchen with 5 fingers,we women can to so many things at the same time but not a man! Wash your hands and get rid of him. He does not deserve the candles.So you must be a woman, not Nic, it's Nicole. Power to the women, love, hulda
 — Hulda

5-6 hit me like a rock, I know this guy.  Excellence.  Succinct, emotive but not emotional.  You have a unique gift in the structure of your writing.  Nice.
 — sybarite

Your somewhat elitist and know it all attitude when it come to poetry prevents me from being completely unbiased with regards to your work Nic. So I read it, but didn't rate.
 — unknown

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