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A Lasting Expression
psychofemale

Curiosity
 1
killed the cat
 2
stepped on the wire
 3
just like that
 4
 
 
Fried the princess
 5
she lost her shoe
 6
One bolt of electricity
 7
her hair looks new
 8
 
 
Full of static
 9
split ends to match
 10
dead on the floor
 11
she once was a catch
 12
 
 
Lipstick smeared
 13
stormy eyes
 14
a lasting expression
 15
caught by surprise
 16
 
 
Sneaky, malicious
 17
he used to say
 18
until she caught him
 19
with her one day
 20
 
 
One hand over mouth
 21
the other with a fist
 22
shocked from the heartache
 23
no one could resist
 24
 
 
The force was too strong
 25
she died on the scene
 26
along with her love
 27
he could never redeem
 28

30 Apr 10

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One BOlt zZZZz her fucking hair, blew.
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my ^ 2c nts for you psyguy
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Lousy title by the way
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should be
FRIED
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Woohoo for Unks! woo whoo for unks!! lets throw a party of the 4 little unks! thats my new song how u all enjoy it! :D hey hey now, number one hit rite their...

want me to grow up, how bout you do first.... WOW!
 — psychofemale

wow i had some typos but who gives a shit.
 — psychofemale

I think unks are all children...
 — psychofemale

haha
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yup.
 — psychofemale

YOu are pyscho
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YOU BETTER BELIEVE IT
 — psychofemale

gahhhhhh.....really? I mean really? pathetic.
 — psychofemale

certainly not about my princess, as she likes it rough and would have redeemed me if i broke her neck.

nice ditty.
 — raskolniikov

lol...
 — psychofemale

I think it can be condensed, but only a wee bit.
I just love this: playful and NOT contrite. THE FEMALE
of this strange, strange species. I speak from...the Middle Ground,
 — R_Reid_Welch

Why thank you :) I am sure this will be condensed when it is set to music one day :D so glad you enjoyed it!!!
 — psychofemale

this, along with the rest of your pieces seem to have high lyricism. you are a songwriter, yes?
this is reminds me of lewis carroll with the rhyme & skewed fantasy set in reality - later to find the fine line between the sacred & profane.

i like. a lot. well done : ]
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Why yes, I am a songwriter! So glad you enjoyed this piece :)
 — psychofemale

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