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Deconstruction
eurydice

I.
 1
In your absence you are no less tangible. You are
 2
a phantom limb: a phenomenon my sight and mind cannot reconcile.
 3
Stubbornly I refuse to relinquish
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the consciousness of substance, of sensation,
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of flesh blood bone
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tarsal tendon nerve (you’ve left me lopsided,
 7
an adoring amputee).
 8
 
 
II.
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Everything,
 10
it seemed,
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had fallen into focus
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with a visceral click-
 13
Saturated color, clarified form,
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a rapid fire succession
 15
of vital vivid vibrant
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still-frame
 17
moments (a reel of spectral negatives cycles through my mind’s eye).
 18
 
 
III.
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In each other we have been illuminated,
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ignited.
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In each other we have been as
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newborn stars (ignite and
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burn, burn and
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cool, cool and
 25
fade) and we have resigned to glimmer feebly from our separate spheres.
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3 May 10

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I like this but three was beautiful
 — psychofemale

I would like a little less conversation, and a little less explanation here.

You have wonderful pacing.
 — Ananke

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