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Love Triangle
psychofemale

Break
 1
the c y c l e.
 2
 
 
Let someone
 3
 
 
go.
 4
 
 
You can't hurt them both.
 5
 
 
If you do,
 6
you'll hurt
 7
 
 
yourself.
 8
 
 
That's not what you want.
 9
 
 
Put the gun
 10
d
 11
o
 12
w
 13
n.
 14
 
 
The gun that kills all three of you.
 15
 
 
You are in control,
 16
 
 
like the kid at school who gets picked on
 17
and has
 18
 
 
the (gun) in his backpack.
 19
 
 
You wouldn't shoot up the school...
 20
would you?
 21
 
 
No.
 22
 
 
So do the right thing...
 23
 
 
Put the gun
 24
d
 25
o
 26
w
 27
n.
 28
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Release.
 29

7 May 10

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interesting......
 — Tandisol

OK pshy

check line 20, i think an O fell outa the backpack.
 — unknown

PUt DoWn the PeN
PuT It dOwN
 — unknown

    No mother ever created her child for a bullet, I like your thoughtful format PF/ Flyer...Goeszon
 — goeszon

wow. this is amazing. thanks for the great read.
 — silentspring

thanks for the feedback guys...:)
I changed line 20 ...thanks ...typo haha
thank ya so much again :D
 — psychofemale

Powerful indicment of how American people go forward each day in fear of never coming back
 — larrylark

thank you larry ;)
 — psychofemale

any one else?
 — psychofemale

free your mind...and the rest with follow
 — unknown

um ok :P
 — psychofemale

any other ideas for this one?
 — psychofemale

cool write
 — unknown

thanks
 — psychofemale

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