| My Favorite Uncle is a Renaissance Man
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sybarite
| Classical violinist and avid photographer | 1 |
black and white, Hasselblad | 2 |
(digital equals blasphemy) | 3 |
Sweet on Model T's, steam engines | 4 |
and bluegrass--when no one's looking. | 5 |
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It would never occur to him | 6 |
to speak down to a child. | 7 |
As a girl, conversations ended | 8 |
with the bang of a starter's pistol--mad dash | 9 |
for the dictionary, | 10 |
fistfuls of vocabulary | 11 |
begging to be understood. | 12 |
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He liked that I read--a lot | 13 |
didn't matter what | 14 |
as long as I was reading. | 15 |
He's the only person | 16 |
who's ever asked me | 17 |
if I have favorite words. | 18 |
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Years later, a conversation | 19 |
about a lack of destination | 20 |
I've always felt--going three directions at once. | 21 |
He recognized a kindred spirit | 22 |
of no fixed address and offered | 23 |
an avuncular pearl: | 24 |
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Disregard maps and bibles. | 25 |
Destiny--for some of us, is | 26 |
the journey. | 27 |
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18 May 10 |
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fabulous, loved this, love the ending, its just how I feel! loved the ending, great read. xx
— crimsonkiss
Wonderful, I agree with crimson I love the ending it's exactly how I feel. this leaves me longing for such an uncle. Excellent write.
— Ilena
Great poem. I especially like lines 1-27.
— JKWeb
sweet sybil-writes, and what are your favourite words today? mine are invertendo-innuendo -- we'd all do well to dive deep for the pearls and come up with their gleam in our eyes; another 'avuncular pearl'
— AlchemiA
... the Map is a guide, like books and bibles and hexagrams derived from yarrow-stalks finger'd with care, yet you'll find yourself in uncharted territories every single time, that's the way to be aware that you're solopsistically-sublime ...
— AlchemiA
LOVE this! I HAD an uncle like this, but he passed when I was a teenager, but as cool as YOURS nonetheless! :-)
— starr
Interesting thoughts you have here.
— psychofemale
Thank you all for the lovely comments~gratitude.
— sybarite
Wow. Beautiful, just, beautiful.
— Callisto
sybaritie, I very much like your poem. It's beautifully compressed and rich in detail and soul without being wordy or inaccessible. Very lovingly portrayed. Thank you.
— smugzy
Thank you smugzy and Callisto!
— sybarite
hope i'm not too late for this ride.
step on it, speedster.
; )
— fractalcore
The bus stops...here....climb aboard!--Thanks for the read frac!
— sybarite
this is really enjoyable and touching... with the avuncular pearl of wisdom... The first stanza was the best for me because it had so much sonic POP!
— jpmhawk
jpmhawk--thanks for the read and feedback, appreciated!
— sybarite
Wonderful piece... j.g. smiles
— goeszon
Thank you goeszon--he is a wonderful man, appreciate the read.
— sybarite
"It would never occur to him to speak down to a child." We all should be so lucky to have someone like this in our lives--you are blessed.
— PaulS
i like the last stanza and the them of childhood in poem generally... i'll re- read...
— greenmantle
i like the last stanza and the them of childhood in poemzzzz ! generally... i'll re- read... !
— greenmantle
Thank you PaulS--yes, blessed, I agree! For a man with no children of his own, he is very in tune with how to communicate with them.
Thanks for reading greenmantle.
— sybarite
m, beautiful, probably one of my favorite on the site. it should be standing #1 i think. i rlly love 1-3, 6-12, 25-27. its sorta if i close my eyes ( or keep them open) i can see it, feel it, smell it, and by that i mean its vivid? it also made me laugh at one point, smirk at another, feel a ting of pain for no apparent reason, and feel complete satisfaction at the end. well done.
— Rss233
You HAVE to be gay. I think your poem is very sweet
— asphara
Thank you bunches Rss233.
Asphara--thank you--but whatever made you come to the conclusion I HAVE to be gay?
For the record, I am not, but I have kissed a girl...and I liked it ;)
— sybarite
was interesting for me until the end, which was way to cliche as a closer: no idea (I'm not disregarding the idea as valid) is more exhausted, especially in new-age philo, than is "life is a journey." As a result I think we have to pick it apart and be exceedingly creative in the ways we describe this.
-Jacob
— uncjaf
uncjaf--appreciate the feedback and understand your objection to "journey" references but in this case, it is how the conversation unfolded and to pay proper tribute to my Uncle, I needed to use his words as they mark a turning point in my evolution :)
— sybarite
Not sure I needed every line, but this is some of the best crafted work I have read on this website. If I had to be super nit picky I would say you could actualy do without lines 1-5. For you, the author, I can tell you wanted us to try and understand the complex type of person, but it wasn't needed. Also lines like 6 are just begging to be the opening act.
— frogilicus
the last 3 lines make the bearable.
— unknown
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