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Pendulum for a Faun
Haxxen

We've driven there before
 1
and will never be driven no more
 2
to that place in the wilds of our wake
 3
on the bank
 4
of that hush'ed Faun Lake
 5
 
 
All the times we've been there before
 6
and the times still to come to be sure
 7
will ne'er be as witching as the morn I recall
 8
as that third weekend spring
 9
out of fall
 10
 
 
It wasn't the dusk in which we arrived
 11
that held my attention
 12
neither Cognac nor hemp's holy high
 13
'Twas the morning of orange
 14
and dawny reprieve
 15
that made me awake
 16
 
 
and made me believe.
 17
 
 
two score and six was the time I awoke
 18
sun barely risen from Set's cavern brig
 19
air heavy
 20
thick
 21
still with evening tide’s dew
 22
and me in your bed
 23
transfixed
 24
 
 
It was the pollen
 25
spewn from the gonads of trees
 26
in the hundreds of thousands
 27
that enchanted me
 28
 
 
the sky was made tawny
 29
and sulfurous gold
 30
an effulgence that bathed you
 31
in beauties untold.
 32
 
 
Ah, glory
 33
 
 
Oh gilt ecstasy
 34
 
 
This vision is Absinthe
 35
in knowing
 36
set free
 37
 
 
Christ's crown of thorns
 38
the sun's coming rays
 39
were filtered through the yellow
 40
of this living haze
 41
 
 
and your breasts were upturned halos
 42
beneath the beast
 43
of your face
 44
 
 
All was covered
 45
 
 
and all was so still
 46
 
 
The color so violent
 47
 
 
And you
 48
were God's will.
 49
 
 
and the water was shrouded
 50
under slicks
 51
of lemon silt
 52
 
 
and coming back up to your million dollar cot
 53
I saw you sat down at your table
 54
Your right hand was raised to a separate heaven
 55
and your left
 56
carried a suspended pendulum
 57
 
 
You asked it your questions
 58
it gave you its answers
 59
I watched and I wished that you knew
 60
 
 
That the gods of your ballast
 61
and lake
 62
and your answers
 63
are the faun
 64
that stands before you.
 65

25 May 10

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fuk me jesus this is fukinforever and a day good
 — unknown

^my sentiments exactly.  
thanks for bringing me here hax,
you're a beautiful writer-- i swoon and die for this...

now fuck off ;)
 — jenakajoffer

wow, ecstatic ...
 — AlchemiA

Damn good stufffffffffff
 — psychofemale

L50-52 my favorite. Please serve over shaved ice with a blessing.
 — NicMichaels

whoa!

i thought |14 was sticking out
its head too much, but it's an
orange head and i liked it.

the rest was all a good surface
to reflect the light.

the transition from ||49-50 was
a bold move but all worth it.

kudos.

who knows, you'll write a better
piece than this and that would be
better for all of us.

i mean, this is already good food.

; )
 — fractalcore

When comments come from Jenna, fractal and alch all in the same work, it makes one feel that one must be doing something right.  Thanks For that.  Jen...lol at "f* me", i guess that you got my reply in Wellesley.  ;) and Fractal, youre right.  14 was sticking out.  I tucked it back in.  thanks for pointing it out.
 — Haxxen

well, i was referring to the sonics along with the image
on that particular line -- don't change it as i think it's
the strophe's saving grace.

it's prosy and cliche in [other] places, too, but that's ok.
i tend to do the same thing.

again, good job on this.
thanks.

; )
 — fractalcore

48 and 49
 — unholy

L's 42-44 for me. Maybe between the next ten comments, we'll have the whole poem torn to favorite pieces
 — Crayon

Beautiful poem!

The rhythm in this made me palpate!
 — dax

  I LIKE ORANGES AND THIS WAS GOOD PEELS$$$
 — goeszon

Life is more complicated than it seems, I think.
 — technomancer

Life is as complicated than it seems, I think.
 — technomancer

"strong belief that we don't have to break the rules of language to convey something new and original"

I like that technomancer.  I believed the opposite, but you're making me rethink.
 — Haxxen

I enjoyed reading this. The words and rhythm flowed effortlessly and swept me away. Thanks.
 — lalita

Ah, Haxxen.  There is nothing more I could say about this that hasn't already been said.  A beautiful piece of writing.
 — PaulS

A complex piece that does not shy away from being complex, and allows both the poet and reader to indulge in great ideas through some abstracted elaborated imagery and forms.
Not sure why this one has passed my notice until now, but well worth the read.
 — jharrison

beauwilderous.
 — unknown

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